Reflection

"This story was very interesting, with it's many twists and turns. Taking into account where the author is from, some of those don't sound right to me. Those are part of the author, and at their discretion. As much as I enjoyed the story I would like to suggest that some type of icon be place between paragraphs when there is a change of location or a space of time has occurred. A few minor spelling question, some help to identify who is speaking, which would make for smoother read be added. Also a follow up check on when the person is think, and when they are speaking would also help. Overall I really enjoyed the story and I hope the author continues to write. Never give up on your dream."