What is your opinion?
Creepy
"Wow, that was a hell of an opening. It's weird because it's like the way it unfolds is so dream like and trippy that it almost drains it of all the tension and anxiety that the scene should have but in a weird way that makes it almost better than if it had been just an action scene. It sort of slips into the side like it's your own dream, it's playing on your own dream logic and that makes it even creepier, like it feels as real as a dream does right after you wake up. The writing is kind of rigid and it doesn't flow well but again it's weird because that fits with dream logic, people in dreams don't talk like they do in real life, they don't think like they do in real life so it just seems to add to the feeling like you as the reader are having a dream. It remind me a lot of a David Lynch movie and the way it starts right in the middle of this event just sucks you right into it in a really strange way and then it just ends."
Fascinating Read
"I have a soft spot for supernatural things going on in a perfectly normal environment, and I love the way that you pulled it off. It was exciting, it had a flat humor to it, and was overall very well written. My only suggestion would be more of an emotional draw as well as the physical. There was little reason to care about Jessica, which is something that a reader will want right off the bat. Regardless, it was fantastic. :)"
Pulling me in
"I love the introduction it draws you in and will leave you asking for more, the author definitely has a knack for writing about the supernatural. Would love to see more and where this story goes."
