"The Plight of the Arshion"

"Interesting story of Sky pilots being attacked by sky pirates. Many things happening on the boat/ship between the crews, the Captain and the Bosan and more as damage to the ship is critical........... The Mother, Captain , knows that the end of the ship is immediate and wants to save her son by making him ride the Pegasus on the ship,to leave the ship, and be free from the destruction of the ship within minutes to follow.. Another Crewmate, stabbed the mother with a deadly cut to the stomach "as she was protecting her son", While trying to keep the son from escaping on his Pegasus. You might consider the position your characters are taking in the story. The Main Characters and the ancillary Characters rolls in the story, It is a bit confusing as the Characters seem to be important, but with only a small mentions, The supporting characters, Except the Buson, The mother, the Son and the Seaman who stabbed the mother to death, are your lead actors making your story come to life........ Well done, well written and look forward to your completed rendition to follow..............best"