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What is your opinion?
This is a good
"This version is suggesting a shame and self hating while struggling with something you can not control. Jeremy is some what cruel but realistic for a teenager dealing with a mentally ill parent and Brianna is more empathetic and an emotional anchor"
I love it
"That’s a strength of yours, the way you make us feel inside the narrator instead of simply pondering it. Yours feels more alive since you invested more in the environment and I focused more in the character. I commend, there were 3 things that caught me off guard. I want to do this more with you, to write and rendition. :)"
