What is your opinion?
A Brave Attempt
"I’m proud to see you starting your writing journey, especially on a platform like Inkitt. Putting a story out there is a big step, and I respect that you did it. The plot is amazing. You have got out of the cliche romance mainplot and turned it into a subplot. I actually liked that. Also, the settings were nice. The MC (Protagonist) running injured sets up the tone for the story. As I read through the chapters, I noticed that while the plot has potential, the emotional depth and human nuance in the characters felt a bit mechanical. For example, Saidi, the protagonist, feels like a superhuman--she is beautiful, smart, astronomer, everything--like everything. For humanizing our characters, we must consider giving them flaws. That way, your readers can relate with your story. The dialogue sometimes sounded overly formal or too polished, almost like it didn’t come from a real person. That takes away from the believability and emotional connection. Story telling is heartfelt, humanize it--turn a high-school trauma into your subplot, rip your page, make the characters look cringe--That way, your story would look flawed and real and readers can connect with it. You have done the first step--wrote your story and published. I want to see more of your stories. For your next stories, make sure to humanize your characters. All the best in your writing journey. "
I'll Never Tell ...
"Beautiful, but chilling, dark-haired, Saidi has many secrets. Beneath her cool exterior, is a fighting machine that few can handle. Since birth, Saidi has been trained in weaponry, martial combat and even to kill if necessary, with no remorse. All for the defense of her country. Those who have underestimated her have learned painful lessons ...if they are lucky enough to survive. Her only equal in spy skills is Daniel. Suave, sophisticated and sexy, he's used to possessing any woman he wants. So why does Saidi have the gaul to turn him down? Didn't she understand his powerful position , and how lucky she was to even earn his attention? At the moment they are both on an extremely important mission for their superior Agent Mama Bear, but once they were through Daniel promised himself he would encourage Saidi to fall in love with him... without giving away his own heart in the process. This novel reminded me of the works of Ian Fleming. Author Fairooz always makes sure that there is action and suspense going on so the reader never gets bored. Saidi and Daniel are a cute couple too, though I sense Daniel is more interested in her than Saidi is in him. (As it should be ladies, 😉) A fun book for when you're in the mood for adventure and a slice of romance."
Emotional and Powerful
"This story had me hooked from the very first page! The characters were well-developed, and I especially loved how the protagonist’s journey unfolded. The author’s writing style was immersive, making it easy to visualize the world and connect with the characters' emotions. The pacing was perfect, with just the right balance of action, suspense, and heartfelt moments. There were a few minor grammatical errors, but they didn’t take away from the overall experience. I highly recommend this book to anyone who loves a gripping and emotional story!"
