What is your opinion?
Good
"I like the story line can't wait for next update im very curious about coming chapter "
Shiv Yukta - The story that has yet to start
"Now this story is an interesting one for me. With only 2 proper chapters out, prologue and chapter 1, it is hard to say where this story is going to go. First I want to comment on your writing style and your writing skills, the chapter look clean and well edited with mistakes that any reader can breeze through without noticing. So job well done on that front. The way you capture the environment of your world is nothing short of alluring. Your descriptions and world building are vivid enough to get me to imagine how staying in a place like this could be. From the coffee shop, to the extravagant palace, you possess an ability to paint a picture with words that not even I can imitate. A true talent. Your issues actually start with the characters in your book which is something I tend to favor more than anything else, but that's just personal bias. Sure we get descriptions about how these characters feel/react, but that's what they are, descriptions. If you were to add more physical reactions, character thoughts and a little more character motivation then It would be much easier relating to these characters. Now granted that your story has yet to pick up I am interested in seeing how you pick off from this point. Fully defining multiple characters within 2 chapters is a monumental task, so maybe just having one character focus could help in this endeavor. Pick one character and run with them until we have a strong sense of their character before bringing other characters into focus. My last gripe is the use of pictures, now I get you're trying to burn the image of your world and these characters into our mind but your descriptions of them are so well done that I don't think you need any of them. You have a talent of painting a picture with your words so don't worry about readers not getting the same image you're getting. You have real untapped potential with this story, so just work on your weak points and you'll be sure to succeed. BTW, I can guess that you are from wattpad too, lmao. "
