Game or Heart

"I really liked short stories but I feel this one had quite a few holes that could have easily been filled in or expanded on. Like more about Noah and why he was so stand-offish, more about his life/pov and more about them sticking to their "no-strings" but slowly giving in to what they have as something deeper. The concept is great and I think it would be even better fleshed out. A few grammatical errors or inconsistencies that broke the flow a bit but not so bad. Keep it up author! I really do think a bit of editing and this would be sale worthy "