What is your opinion?
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"Love it I couldn't put it Down it's a amazing book. Love reading it and couldn't put it down at all."
Love it!
"I honestly reccomend this novel. The beginning although feels cliché, I assure you it is not. Read it! Also, to other freshman's that feel like freaks, read this! I hope it'll give you an ounce, at least, of confidence!"
Fair
"Hi Bria, I read the entire story of your first book and I have some things to say. For the good news. Your story is very well written. I like the descriptions, dialogue, and excellent technical writing skills. Your blurb certainly has caught me and the wonderfully written prologue. Now for my criticism. You may have noticed the plot was rated the lowest. The reason for that is that your plot didn't seem to have a very good climax. I couldn't even directly pinpoint it. The hologram part which was literally half of the book basically destroyed your climax. That is one of the points I thought it felt like. I feel that it was a lazy way of saying "oh, I don't like the plot, I'm going to just change it like that" and trust me, I've done this a ton of times and they never work out unless you stress heavily from the beginning that it will be that way and that your story centralizes around that theme. The magical cards you set out the story to be was just missing and was all about relating to the cards. This brings me to the title. Invited by the Elements. I don't think I felt that magic from the title in the story. It didn't go with your plot much. I didn't feel like there was a strong solid plot I can flesh out. At least to what your title might suggest. In other words, we were already prepared that Seven was a hopeless idiot liar. Also, the genre is incorrect. This story doesn't seem like it is written for children but rather a romantic story which I was completely not prepared for. But it was all good in the end since I have read quite a few stories with this mix. One thing that was very difficult to catch until you have gone into the middle of the story. The point of views switch. It wasn't clearly indicated so this is confusing to your readers when they read it. About Princess Cressida, I was hoping we would get to know her a lot more than you introduced her to be because I felt that the main character was not Mixie, but Seven in midway. It is Mixie, right? Well, because you keep switching points of views, your protagonists from your reader's point of view seem to change which causes a lot of confusion. Do you get what I'm saying? At this point, it is very very difficult for you to modify this story so your readers will understand what goes on from the beginning. This is the sort of thing readers want to look for. If you can modify, I would suggest maybe writing in third person to flesh out the antagonist section to be more effective. This is just a suggestion. The way I see book two looks like a repeat of book one because Mixie was in the hologram for like the most part of the book and she is starting to see it again yet that was at the end of the book. But overall, you are a very strong writer because you know how to evoke these images that you want your audience to see, and it is a very easy story to read through as your technical skills are on point. At least to the point I didn't see any spelling or grammatical errors. Good luck in submitting to contests and I hope my comments will help you to improve as a writer and to help you learn how to get a bigger audience and chance in writing contests."
