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What is your opinion?
Innocent vampire Gals
"Weird but entertaining story! Kinda funny🤣 in a good way! ❤️and✝️🛐s for all"
Good
"Good so far "
promising, but needs work
"The overall flow of these chapters is not bad, and the characters do seem to have a spark to them. However there are a few grammatical issues here and there which need addressing so that the 'flow' of the words is less interrupted. Not so many full-stops whilst a character is speaking; likewise try to avoid too many commas in sentences, which can sometimes trip a reader up. Remember, reading a book should be easy, writing it is an absolute pain! That said, the author clearly has talent and obviously enjoys writing, so keep going whatever you do!"
