What is your opinion?
Pleasantly surprising
"Interesting start to the story that catches your attention. Can't wait to see what happens."
Needs more
"I am curious how the story will go but it needs something to keep me interested to find out. Theres a lot of repetition of the nannys thoughts which makes me want to skip paragraphs. There is no explanation of the nannys past to why she is how she is. There is no explanation for why lala is how she is. I fell asleep 3 times trying to stay interested without any attention getting moments so far. Id really love to see the creativeness im sure you have, for the plot. It would have been nice for maybe a touch of the nannys and fathers hands briefly of her being comforting and strong for him as well as lala after the mother came to the house and they planned. Something of a glimpse of what could happen between them later. "
