Inkitt
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Awesome

"I usually prefer system stories in graphic novel format, but the way you wrote this let me clearly see what was going on without any clunky written formatting. Very well done! Also, this was a surprisingly down to earth story while being pretty gripping at the same time. I can't wait to see what you do with the next book. :)"

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An unusual beginning

"Not the run of the mill start! At 7 chapters in, I'm enjoying the peek inside the MC's head. "

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How I accidentally accessed the System

"Ever grow up an orphan, or missing a parent or buddy for feedback, or go through a patch wanting pointers, or secretly feel like a zero and want to be a hero, or a geek wanting a HUD and prompts and a map for the game of life? This tale of a 30yo incel who exits his man cave and wins the approval of the universe and himself is funny and wise. Shade of Terry Pratchett"

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How I accidentally accessed the system

"Truly novel and inspiring storyline. I have enjoyed the development of Chris as a person and look forward to more details as his character grows. Thank you for sharing your work with us."

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