Introduction of characters
This book is part of a series. The characters in the series are a work of fiction; any similarity to real-life people is completely coincidental and, therefore, should not matter. The pictures that represent a certain character are taken from Pinterest; hence, some resemblance to real-life people is bound to happen. I hope you’ll enjoy the story and find some sense of peace or an opportunity to escape.
TW: This story contains swearing, mature themes, sexual content, and illegal activities.
Copyright: All rights reserved. No part of this publication may be reproduced, distributed, or transmitted in any form or by any means, including photocopying, recording, or other electronic or mechanical methods, without the prior written permission of the publisher.
English is not my first language, so I’m sorry for any spelling and grammar mistakes. With that being said (or written), let’s begin.
Isabella Sinclair:
Niccolo Lucchese:
Aww man! I'll read some of your other work, then, if I can. @iris_may83
Okay. Do you have any other books that are appropriate for younger teens? @iris_may83
This opening feels very honest and welcoming. I liked how you set expectations up front, especially with the content warning and the note about English not being your first language, it makes the story feel approachable and gives the reader a clear entry point.
The tone is simple but sincere, and that works well for an introduction because it feels like you’re speaking directly to the reader. If you wanted to make it even stronger, I’d focus on sharpening the phrasing a little so the disclaimer and welcome feel even smoother and more polished. Would you be open to more detailed feedback on pacing, voice, and the setup for what comes next?