holy ravioli

"Really quick-- Strenghts: Atmosphere and Mood are incredibly done; Dynamic characters, Consistent Characterization, Realistic Character Dynamics; Above Average Grammar; Good Prose; Fitting Dialogue; Intriguing Plot; Weaknesses: suffers from White Room syndrome; some Typos and rare (unfitting) Tense Shifts; Lack In Clarity; This was written nearly over a decade ago and Wow, I cannot wait to read the main story or another original fiction story from this author. The atmosphere and scene direction is SO good! My favorite character is the dog, by the way."