What is your opinion?
outstanding
"what an amazing writer loved it "
Feedback to the author
" Your story has a strong and emotional idea, Martin’s journey in a world of war is powerful. You show real imagination and heart, which is amazing for a young writer. Just be careful with: - Rushing through big scenes—slow down and let readers feel the moment. - Repeating the same words too often (like “fire” or “grief”). - Small grammar mistakes—easy to fix with practice. Everyone ain't perfect, not me nor anyone else, but one can fight for perfection. Keep going! You have great potential. Don’t be afraid to make mistakes—they help you grow. You’re already on the path to becoming a strong writer. Well done!"
Genuine Review
"As much as I like this story, there are a few parts that feel too stretched out, or some parts that could have been used to create more character development. And since the story is still in modern times, I would expect modern names in the story, but the names seem too old- Egyptian names- which really affects the reading experience. The plot is strong, yet there could have been a lot more subplots in some areas. Subplots could've improved the main plot and even the MC. Small details do make a story intriguing and exciting. I hope you consider this for the future! And, Overall I give this a 4.1-4.2 stars. Thank You"
