Lost - Review

"This is an interesting approach. I believe that this is what is termed ‘metafiction’ where you are deliberately making the reader aware that this is just a story rather than just telling a story. You have Kelly as the narrator in this story with the writer actually being inside Kelly’s head. I’m not sure if this is going to work or whether you will be able to sustain it through a whole novel. But how about if the writer is the narrator but is speaking directly to her character, Kelly as the story progresses? In other words turn the whole premise on its head and – just a suggestion – somehow have the writer assume the persona of Kelly (or vice versa) as the story progresses. I would suggest you aim for a short story rather than a novel. However you choose to do it I think you have the bones of an intriguing story here, but be sure to hone your words and dialogue to the appropriate context. You are attempting a very ambitious approach here and I applaud you for it. This would come under the heading of ‘literary’ if it comes off. In accordance with the approach I have just suggested I have attempted a rewrite which I will reproduce as a comment to this review to avoid clogging the box up. Hope this helps. If you feel like reciprocating I have the following novels up for the contest that could do with a download and chapter read. Wouldn’t mind a review or two as well. Don’t seem to be getting many although I’m getting a lot of reads. To Hell with the Harp! www.inkitt.com/stories/149100 Slippered! www.inkitt.com/stories/148145 Hair of the Dog www.inkitt.com/stories/147116"