I felt very panickly reading this an story.

"For a Serverblight fan story, this was actually very nice! Although the biggest thing weighing it down was the various grammatical errors in the story, I'd say the actual plot was something original and had a good concept in mind, but the execution was not the greatest. I'd say the biggest thing that needs to be worked on is grammar and punctuation, but otherwise, this was a good read! Seriously, I nearly had a stroke reading some of these paragraphs, but I can sense that you can write some really good stuff in the future if you just work on that grammar."