Great beginning

"I thoroughly enjoyed both the writing style and the plot itself. The dialogue was fresh and the characters were very real. I found the ending very affecting. The reason that I marked it down was because I thought more could be done with the very beginning. At first, I was confused. Perhaps a more vivid description of the battlefield and what is happening on it would solve the problem... Despite this, it drew me in from the beginning, and I hope that the author will soon post more."