Magic in Manhattan - Review

"This author has a distinctive style - I suspect you could spot a David Frenkel anywhere. In this one there's a hint of Mickey Spillane and more than a hint of Tom Holt. I don't read straight fantasy, but this is wacky and tongue in cheek and that intrigues me - I do want to know how this works out, OK, it needs work stylistically and syntactically but this is a draft. I'm torn on the treatment - do I want the explanation of the fliers where the author has put it, or do I want it at the very beginning of the piece? At the beginning it might give me a bit more of an idea what is going on but the author likes to do his own thing. However, as a reader, I am confused at the beginning so perhaps I need to be fed a bit of a raison d'etre somewhere. Interesting. A lot of tightening up needed but could have possibilities,"