The Secrets Underneath

"I saw your post in Review Me and was drawn to the title, which I really like. I only read the first chapter and found it hard going. I had to re-read paragraphs because there was no punctuation and the impact was lost. It needs better world building and sequencing. You start in third person limited / external/descriptive mode, then shift into the maid’s internal perspective, which is not easy to follow. The idea itself is great but needs editing. Please don't be upset, I am not trying to criticize, only to help with an honest opinion. Don't give up. Big hugs"