Prologue
The night Cassiel and Vespera disappeared, the sky bled silver. Thick clouds rolled across the heavens, swallowing the stars in their wake. A storm brewed on the horizon, but no rain ever fell. Instead, the air had gone still, heavy with the kind of silence that did not belong in a place as alive as Cirque Éclipse.
Alouette remembered the way the lanterns flickered, casting long, twisting shadows against the velvet walls of the main tent. The final performance of the evening had ended, the crowds dispersed, the world beyond their borders retreating into its quiet oblivion. Yet within the circus, something had shifted. Something had unraveled.
She hadn’t been able to sleep that night.
She had wandered through the empty tent, her bare feet whispering against the cool ground, drawn forward by a strange, gnawing unease she could not name. And then—
The mirrors began to shift.
Not the way reflections should. No, the circus’s mirrors were different. They rippled, deep and endless, like pools of ink disturbed by an unseen hand.
And in them, she had seen something wrong.
Cassiel’s silhouette, tall and sharp, standing at the heart of the ring. Vespera’s form beside him, draped in black, her eyes cold as the void. They faced each other as if caught in some silent battle—one neither of them could afford to lose.
Their lips moved, but no sound reached her.
And then—
Light. Blinding, searing light.
It had burst from the mirrors, from the circus itself, from them, swallowing everything in a violent surge that sent Alouette staggering back.
By the time the light faded, they were gone.
Cassiel. Vespera. The ringmaster and the mistress, the twin rulers of their kingdom of illusions. Their absence echoed in the hollow air, in the way the tent seemed emptier than it should have been, as if something vital had been stolen away.
And the circus?
It did not mourn
The show continued, the performances went on. The world did not stop spinning simply because two people had vanished. But beneath the surface, whispers crept through the bones of Cirque Éclipse like ivy through stone.
Some claimed Cassiel had finally been swallowed by his own magic. That Vespera had betrayed him. That they had been devoured by something older than the circus itself.
But Alouette knew one thing for certain.
The mirrors were still shifting.
And something—someone—was watching from the other side.
This prologue is beautifully eerie, the circus setting feels alive and mysterious, and the language is rich without being overdone. The image of the sky “bleeding silver,” the mirrors that ripple like ink, and the sudden vanished figures of Cassiel and Vespera all create a strong sense of something ancient and unsettling under the surface of this world.
I especially liked how the circus itself almost feels like a character: the lanterns, the velvet walls, the hollow air after they disappear, and the fact that “the circus did not mourn” is chilling. The final line, that something is watching from the other side of the mirrors, leaves a perfect lingering mystery.
One small note: the pacing is very dreamlike, which fits the tone, but letting one or two of the key moments (the light, the disappearance) land with a tiny bit more space could make them hit even harder. Overall, this is a captivating, atmospheric prologue that makes me really want to know what happened to Cassiel and Vespera.
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