Valentine's Surprise

Jaxsomething

10 chapters read

Really interesting, writting skills are good too

"Digestable, not fun and romantic"

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Sasha

13 chapters read

Valentine's surprise

"What a beautiful story, loved this friendship between them that became love."

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JlD

13 chapters read

♥️♥️♥️

"Funny and sexy"

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Ebonyluv

13 chapters read

Valentine's suprise

"That was hot 🔥 🥵 "

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finchjoyce40

11 chapters read

Valentine's Surprise

"Absolutely loved this. Best friends make the best lovers. I find the the best relationships started out as the couple being friends first. I always wished I had the courage to tell my HS mbf that wanted more but I was worried it would ruin out friendship, it sucks bc time just the passing of time did that. I still miss him. Glad they got their HEA"

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Valentine’s Surprise

"Great little story! ❤️‍🔥"

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Amanda

10 chapters read

Good story

"It was a good read and I read it all in one sitting. The were a few times when words were out of order, missing or repeated but it is still a good read."

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Ahmed

10 chapters read

A nice romantic story

"I liked this story so much the characters are loved and I wish there were more erotic scenes in the story."

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Evtida

13 chapters read

Eva

"It was a very simple story, so there was virtually no emotional depth. The sex scenes were so repetitive that I just thought, "Okay, we get it—you're like rabbits in mating season." A major plot hole was that, even though everyone knew they loved each other, no one actually did anything about it. And that dining table fantasy was terrible."

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Joceyq

12 chapters read

Story with potential but author still needs to work on it a lot

"The basis of story are good, interesting. But later it feels like two not-too-confident teenagers trying to make some adult relations between them. I understand the story is in first draft and not edited and while all the grammar mistakes and punctuations (there is huge amount of them) could be forgiven for now, the lack of sense in many sentences could be not. One sentence about Cindy having a morning shift but him not being able of taking his eyes off of Hadley had no sense at all. How Cindy having a shift at the hotel had anything to do with him looking at Hadley? And there was an enormous amount of sentences built with this kind of logic: 'Those flowers were blue but I like soup'. Also I would expect Colin doing smth worse to her on Valentine's Day from all the descriptions of how he was. Talking about his behaviour among his friends had nothing to do with what he did to her on that day. It would be a good light story if only author put more work into it. I keep my fingers crossed. Btw. It is more romance than erotica to me."

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