Great, of course. :D

"Hi Jami, Practicing reviewing on The Slum Heirs. First off, the beginning makes me think of what we learned in my Core Sem class this spring when we talked about gentrification. I'm not sure if you know what that is, no one in my class knew what it was except for like two guys in their 30s and 40s. But it would be interesting I think if you explored it at least a little bit in your story. I think its a pretty big topic right now considering that I feel its the hipster thing to take old, worn down places and renovate them. Oooh "public relations" boyfriend. I like the intrigue in that sound. Ooh see here I was thinking it would some greater political stunt, but I think its interesting how her father seems to be grooming Marc for the position to take over the company rather than herself. "Are you coming home with us, Mikaela[?]" Mom asked... My grammar is bad, so ignore me if I'm wrong, but should there be a question mark there instead of a comma? When Mick restates what Marc asked, about the movie and dinner, was she just firmly saying that that was going to happen and she didn't need to ask her parents' permission? "Dad [shook Marc's] hand,..." Missing a space there. You know, I actually prefer guys to keep to themselves in public. I don't know why, but PDA really bugs me. Maybe its because I'm thinking that everyone is staring at me... I think I'd be terrified of walking everywhere in New York, despite wanting to live there. But its cheaper to walk and probably a little easier according to what I hear. Oooh Marc knows its a business relationship! Maybe he has some resentment later on about that? Ooh seven months till graduation. I knew kids who didn't decide until a month before they left. I knew a year ahead almost, but there's no rush! Wow, he's an asshole. No wonder she doesn't want to be with him. Jerk! Anyways, I think this is a pretty good start. I reminds me of another book I read, I can't remember what it was called, but it wasn't all that great. And instead of having a fake boyfriend, the girl fell in love with her best friend who ran his own company and turned out to be nuts. It was also set far into the future. I like yours better, of course. Your writing style flows and is easy to understand. With a few minor mistakes, its still great and nothing that can deter me. Your characters seemed to be pretty realistic and Mick has a lot of personality and I can already tell she's a strong, badass woman. Love it. You do you girl. Anyways, I hope though that her father is shown caring about more than just the company (although if that's it than that's fine. I know people like that, actually). And a part of me really wants her parents' relationship to be good. There's too many stories out there now where the parents either hate each, aren't there, are dead, or for whatever reasons aren't there in the picture. Which I guess is how a YA story needs parents in order to write it properly, get the protagonist on their own, but it gets a little boring. So much could be do with involved parents! Sorry, I'll stop ranting. I like the tension in this beginning chapter. The parents, the slums, the construction, the boyfriend, college, and Tyler. All adds up to plenty of subplots and lots of exciting things to see. I'm excited to continue on to the next chapter. So great job, but then I already knew it would be great. :D"