Fortie

"There is a subtle humor going on in this story that makes it very pleasant to read! The author has obviously put a lot of time into it already; it is polished and therefore shining. Once thing I have to advice the author is to make the speech texts a bit shorter. I think the conversations are too drawn-out and therefore get boring: this is the weak part of the story. What I did enjoy were the lively characters, the plot (!!) and the unique atmosphere created by switching between long and short sentences. Good job for this, I hope the author can tune it into perfection!"