What is your opinion?
So far I am enjoying it
"So far I am enjoying this. The plot is solid. Interesting. The flow is good."
Perfect
"A great idea combined with a great author makes for a perfect story. This is going to be one of those in my opinion. Your descriptions are very vivid; I can see and imagine every scene that you have written. Your story starts in an “amusing” way, but yet, the stories in the beginning are far from amusing and that beginning is everything, it is the reason for the rest of Jackson’s actions and a reason for this whole story. What Jackson has gone through in his early childhood, with all the deranged men his mother has had, with the mother herself and with the orphanage has made for a disturbed child and probably a disturbed adult. This story has a powerful message in it and its idea is very deep. I would love to read the rest when you write it. I have to point to one thing that you might have missed. You write in third person perspective, but there is one sentence in the “Present Day” Chapter that is written in first person. So, you might want to change that. However, even this mistake had me puzzled and got me thinking in certain directions."
