Personal tone

"What I like about this story is the personal tone of it. It made me feel like I was really experiencing all the events described myself. That’s quite a great feat of the author, I believe. However, I do have to say that the constant addressing of “you” got a bit tiresome. I would advice the author to change this in some parts and to be a bit more creative with the writing style. But what I liked, of course, is the fact that the author lets the reader choose what chapter to go to next! I didn’t understand this at first, but then it made sense to me and I have to say it’s so creative! Like this the reader can kind of write her own story… Well done on this creative feature."