Intriguing

"This is a really nice and interesting idea for a story and your introduction is really sweet. It reveals enough, but not too much I believe that this has a good potential to become a really nice story and I hope you will continue in the right direction. These kinds of stories are bound to be thrilling and dynamic and I hope it will live up to expectations. I would only suggest that you do further editing and proofreading. This would add to the seriousness and quality of your story. Overall, I think you are doing fine so far and I would love to read more. You have me intrigued."