Review after Chapter 8

"Hi. I found this story on the Beta-Readers Group and thought I would share my opinion. As I am new to inkitt I hope this ist the correct place to do it, but here goes nothing: I really like the action scenes in the story. They are written in a very graphic way, allowing for easy visualization of what is happening. I also liked the flashback to how Avinashura got his power. You showed it in a short and interesting way, instead of it completely leaving the main plot alone. My only critique to the flashback ist, that it does not feel like an ancient text it is supposed to be, as it shows too many aspects of modern writing to invoke that feeling. It reads more like a vision Prahal has, than an old text he reads. My biggest criticism about the sory is, that I do not care a lot about the heroes or the world. Horrible things are happening, but I do not feel connected to them and therefore their death doesn't mean much to me, which unfortunately also casts a shadow on the action scenes. They just mean a lot less if you do not care about the outcome. Maybe more information about the heroes and the world after the Pancha Veers first fight would have been good. The action had calmed down there and you could show why the reader should care about them and the world. At the moment they just seem like generic superhero team A and I can't really empathize with the normal people of the world, why their success or failure would be a big deal to me. I hope this helps. Continue the good work :)"