What is your opinion?
Good story
"Looking forward for new chapter "
A Love In The Mist.
"Very good sensory descriptions, the dialog is somewhat good. But, there is alot of unnecessary explaining or narration that tells more than shows, and the author didn't take advantage of this very intimate first person P.O.V to let as inside the characters minds. The thing with it is, it allows you to not need to over explain because you could just use their inner thoughts to convey things instead of narrating them. So then that allows you to just worry about the action beats and description of other things. It's like a quick way to be a little lazy with it, because the characters are doing the heavy lifting with their thoughts and actions, and it also let's the readers to possess your characters for a few moments as they read. Know what I mean?😏😉😁 good story though, it felt a bit mysterious and tense, which is good for page turning. The pacing wasn't too bad as well. Good job. 👍"
