What is your opinion?
BEHIND ASHES AND SMOKE
"This was a gripping and emotional opening that immediately pulled me into Amara's heartbreaking situation, and the mysterious stranger made me eager to find out what happens next. One suggestion would be to slow down a few emotional moments and add a little more description of Amara's thoughts and surroundings to make the tension and heartbreak hit even harder. This chapter was heartbreaking and incredibly intense—I could really feel Amara's desperation and the emotional weight of the impossible choice she was forced to make, and the ending hit hard. One suggestion would be to slow down the fire scene and Amara's emotional reactions a little more, allowing readers to fully absorb the horror and guilt, which would make the climax even more powerful."
He gonna take care of her... hopefully
"The beginning was very descriptive on the setting; felt like the doctor giving the bad news. Worry not, Mr. hot moneybags is her to save the day! He gives her free stuff, but only three chapters in, I think he wants more!"
