THE UMBRELLA
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THE UMBRELLA

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there has been rainbows, eversince you came in my life!

Summary

My heart was drenched in sorrow when you came and gave it sunlight!

Status
25d ago
Chapters
4
Rating
5.0 (2 reviews)
Age Rating
16+

Chapter 1: THE UMBRELLA.



**THE UMBRELLA [A Short Story]**


In a city as busy as Mumbai, with signals turning red and heavy traffic, it's raining everywhere. Our girl, dressed in an office suit, is stuck in the traffic of her mind.


Walking down the busy road with heavy, tired eyes and shoulders hunched—as if she has been carrying a lot inside—she walks through the city lights at night without an umbrella. Every piece of her is drenched with sorrow. With her face looking down, the rain suddenly stops.


She looks at her trembling hands and realizes the rain is no longer taking her away from herself. She looks up in the hope of catching a glimpse of a starry night after the rain, but her eyes collided with a pair of green marble eyes which were already looking at her. That beautiful face with pink lips and redness around the eyes smiled at her, handed her the umbrella, held her hand, and made her twirl.


She was mesmerized by his eyes, but as soon as reality hit her, she turned and he was nowhere to be seen.


She then looked around; the actual world, more busy than her thoughts, somehow seemed more alive and beautiful. She realized the rain had actually stopped, leaving a starry sky with beautiful scars of clouds.


She closed the umbrella. There was a price tag on it.


"Oh! So it's expensive! It also has a receipt attached... was it just bought?"





Let Cosmica 🌸🍂✨ know what you thought about this chapter!

YGW SERIES
YGW SERIES

Book are always good and. and this actually suprised me again.🤩🤩🤩🤩

25 days
Miraii
Miraii

**☔ CHAPTER 1 — THE UMBRELLA | Sometimes, the universe sends sunshine disguised as a stranger. 💚✨**

Okay, WAIT. CAN WE TALK ABOUT HOW BEAUTIFULLY THIS CHAPTER WAS WRITTEN?! 😭💗

First of all, the way you introduced Mumbai through the rain, traffic, city lights, and the never-ending rush of everyday life was genuinely beautiful. You didn't just describe a rainy night; you created an entire atmosphere that made me feel like I was walking alongside our girl. And the detail about her being dressed in an office suit, walking without an umbrella, with tired eyes and hunched shoulders... THAT HIT DIFFERENTLY. Sometimes, the heaviest storms aren't the ones falling from the sky, and I absolutely loved how you conveyed that without having to explain everything about her pain. 🥺

**The line about her being stuck in the traffic of her mind? HELLO?!** THAT IS SUCH A BEAUTIFUL METAPHOR. 😭 The contrast between Mumbai's chaotic roads and the chaos inside her mind was so meaningful. It immediately made me wonder what she had been carrying all this time and what kind of experiences had left her feeling so emotionally exhausted.

AND THEN CAME THE UMBRELLA SCENE. ☔💚

The moment the rain suddenly stopped and she looked up, expecting to see the night sky, only to meet those mysterious green marble eyes... I WAS NOT PREPARED. The transition from loneliness to this unexpected encounter was so cinematic. I could genuinely imagine this scene playing out in a romantic movie, with the rain slowly fading into the background and everything else becoming momentarily quiet.

Those green eyes, the pink lips, the redness around his eyes, and that gentle smile... YOU REALLY KNOW HOW TO CREATE A VISUAL FIRST IMPRESSION. And the fact that he didn't simply hand her the umbrella but also held her hand and made her twirl? EXCUSE ME??? THAT WAS SO DREAMLIKE. 😭💚

I especially loved how she became mesmerized by him, only for reality to catch up with her and make him disappear. That little moment left me with SO MANY QUESTIONS. Was he actually there? Was it a fleeting encounter? Was there something magical about that moment? Or was this the beginning of something neither of them expected?

And the ending?! THE PRICE TAG AND THE RECEIPT?! GIRLLLL. 😭😭

After giving us this mysterious, almost fairytale-like encounter, you brought us right back to reality with the most unexpectedly funny detail. I genuinely wasn't expecting that little twist! It made the ending feel playful while leaving behind an even bigger mystery. Was the umbrella newly purchased? Did he deliberately give it to her? WHO IS THIS GREEN-EYED MYSTERY MAN?!

Another detail I adored was how the world around her seemed more alive and beautiful after that encounter. The rain had stopped, the clouds had left their beautiful scars across the sky, and suddenly she was looking at everything differently. That change felt symbolic, almost as if one unexpected moment had reminded her that even after difficult days, there is still beauty waiting to be noticed.

What I appreciate most is that you allowed the emotions to unfold through little details rather than rushing into explanations. The storytelling feels soft, visual, and full of curiosity. I also love the contrast between the melancholic beginning and the whimsical ending.

**My favourite elements:**
- The traffic of her mind metaphor.
- The mysterious green marble eyes. 💚
- The unexpected hand-holding and twirl.
- The beautiful imagery of clouds leaving scars across the sky.
- THAT PRICE TAG AND RECEIPT ENDING. 😂

Cosmica, this chapter genuinely feels like the opening scene of a soft, mysterious romantic film. You have created a beautiful atmosphere and introduced a meeting that leaves readers curious about what comes next.

I'm especially interested in discovering who this stranger is, why he gave her the umbrella, and whether their paths will cross again.

**Sometimes, an umbrella is more than something that protects us from the rain. Sometimes, it becomes the beginning of a story we never knew we needed.** ☔💗

Congratulations on such a lovely first chapter, author! You've officially made me curious about this mysterious green-eyed stranger. I'M READY FOR CHAPTER 2! 😭✨

4 days
Jad Dittmar
Jad Dittmar

This umbrella has a price tag...

2 days

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