heartwarming story

"This is a very strong start haha I'm very weak for school theme and this is one is well done, the male pov hit harder. The good points is that it's easily readable and your translate the emotions well. Some imagery scene are very well written, the reader can feel how Aiden is traumatized by the mockery of his old classmates (the gym scene, the alarm...) you translated emotion very well it's what makes your story stand up and really strong on the male pov. The weak point is his new face and physical reaction to other girls looking at him differently. This look like a caricatore of any basic rom/rom, this is not realistic on the other hand what would be more appealing and deeper in this story would be how actual girls would react to a new guy who's hot and never got to see him before? The starring is weak. Once or twice is ok but for now this is the only changement in others but you could bring up ideas like (boys actually impressed by his muscles for example this is realistic in real life they're even more curious about it than girls, the cafeteria seating and random girls asking to seat and talk about anything which never happened to him before for example) this is simple points but it will make the story feel even more appealing because of the accuracy and the fact that those simple things never happened to him before 😊 Overall this is a very strong start and I will follow this story! Great work! "