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"It was good but I would have liked it to be longer."
MY BELOVED
"This chapter has a very addictive opening, with Damian's dark and ruthless personality instantly grabbing attention, while Isabella's lonely and heartbreaking situation creates strong emotional contrast. The family dynamics, mystery, and looming collision between Damian and Isabella make me curious to keep reading. To make it even better, consider showing more of Isabella's emotions through actions and dialogue, and tighten some of the long family-background explanations so the pacing stays fast and suspenseful."
