The Last Shift

"Great wonderful work. Got a great plot, wonderful compelling characters and weird supernatural ending. However, I think the story needs more time to cook. Some times when I feel deep invested in the story, some few things in your writing tend to remove me from immersion. I am sorry for being blunt. But I love your book. I need you to return back and fixes those trip wire immersion destroyer. They are not many fortunately. Anyway, I am now following after I read one of your book, what is it call again? Dark? I think it's 'Dark'. "