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What is your opinion?
Interesting
"Good plot, but I think there are a few issues with, specifically at the beginning of the story"
Chills and thrills a ghost in the walls
"I feel like you should reduce on telling us how much time has passed, a few hours later this and a few hours later that,also not to judge but beginning your story with one Saturday.... Maybe say something like, It was hot and humid summer morning when a black van and a car drove into a silent neighbourhood..... Just an example. Maybe also reduce on alot of dialogue since your story is in 3rd person pov. You can explain somethings yourself. Like they agreed on ....... i stead of a person suggesting then they agree. This are just my honest thoughts and if you feel that I am too judgey then I apologise "
