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I see this getting published!
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Interesting premise
"The prologue was very engaging and really drew me in on what was going on, but during the second chapter I got a bit confused 'cause there were these long paragraphs of exposition thrown in at us that took me a while to fully grasp. This occurs several times in the story, "telling" instead of "showing" the readers what's going on can put people off so be careful of how you want your world to be laid out.. With that said, the plot and characters are interesting and I appreciate the lore you built surrounding the world you created, just be careful on how you execute it."
