Adorable piece of art

"It is a ŕeally amazing novel, characters full of life, events described in away you feel as if you see it already, but a very sad end,i cried for it "

Zakiah Adara: Year One

"I loved this book a lot! I want more chapters to come ASAP. I liked this book bc it made me experience many emotions: fear, sadness, anger, etc. It was the perfect mix of action, fantasy, romance, and realistic fiction in one book, and made me want to read more and more! This book is definitely recommended to teens 13+!"

Awesomeeeee

"This one is different from what i have read so far.... it keeps me on edge everytime.... such an interesting one.... waiting for the next part...."

Zakiah Adara

"I really enjoyed your book very unique from other books on here. I am ready for book 2"

It was amazing i loved it

"I loved the book I am in total suspense right now it is so imotional and great I can hardly believe i love the whole story but I am sad that t Akki had to die it is so sad I almost cried I want to kill that batch so badly I can literally taste it BEST BOOK EVER MY CONDOLENCES TO DEVONA don't worry I loved him too Don't be jealous either cause he's all yours sweetheart "

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Fascinating

"It is very Fancinating to read a story full of Fantasy and specially when love is not complete as story , I really like the Imagination of Author and his writing skill, u dictated everything so beautifuly that when I read it I lost in the story and I hope I will read soon the second year of Zakira ....And who will come back ??? "

LOVE IT!!!

"I LOVE THIS BOOK SOOOOO MUCH!!!!Though you really need to make another book,more Princesses!!! Whoooo!!!Girl Power!!!Mabey it could even be Devona's BFF???That would make it even better!!!Plus can you pleeease make Akki come back,together with Thea and Authur amd the whole family is back!Other than that,LOVE this book sooooo much!!!"

Love!

"This book is truly enticing! I feel head over heels for it after the first few pages. I'm rather upset that you let the black wolf die but I truly hope that you let him return so he can truly be happy I would also love to know what was in the package! I can't wait for the next novel! I'm looking forward to it! Keep up the good work and I will be on the look for your next book! "

Zakiah Dahara

"This novel is work of a genius! the plot is amazing I love how the fight between evl and good. The twisted love that make me cry. Im hoping that book 2 was this good or better! and hopping to meet Arthur and Thea more in the following novels. Good job!👍👍👍👍"

Chapter 1!

"The Wachowski brothers should owe you royalties or something for stealing your basic plot premise there, lol... "But, once again, according to the laws of dating" This line made me giggle. "Kimmy was disgusted for a second, but it was quickly replaced by her own cocky smile." Like the establishment here that for Kimmy it's more about fucking with Devona than enjoying fucking Mark. Excuse my French. Small but it's a good character establishment moment! "why don’t you dump that dumb blonde and just go out with me?” YEAH! PURPLE HAIR IS THE BEST! :p "Silence was his only response. Kimmy could feel her heart breaking." Huh, I guess there is some attachment there and it might not just be entirely a thing to mess with Devona? Or maybe she's in love with the idea of messing with Devona? "Devona smiled, “Or maybe your dad won’t let you." Ha ha! Insert stereotype about Asian women and driving here! (Speaking as an Asian woman, they are actually true. >_>) “I’m not going to die!” DEATH FLAG ACTIVATED. Whaddaya mean she's the main character and her picture is at the top of the page! :P "Elsewhere in the carnival, a group with peering eyes watched from a distance." Shifty eyes means eviiiiiiiil! Or peering. Close enough. XD "Little did she know, she wouldn’t get any sleep that night." I personally REALLY dislike the use of this device, particularly here in a limited third person PoV. It breaks up the flow of the character's PoV, because you've basically just had me, as a reader, inside Devona's head, then suddenly I leap out of Devona's head, into an omniscient third person narrator PoV (who also knows the future, or has at least read the blurb) for one line, then immediately back into her head. And it's super-distracting and it crushes the smoothness of the narrative. At least for me. This next one's probably down to personal preference, but it kinda weirded me out. "But as the footsteps got louder, they demanded her attention and she finally replied. [paragraph break] She glanced up just in time to see a tall dark man running straight at her." 'Replied' is appropriate because it indicates that she's giving her attention, but 'replied' is usually used as a dialogue cue, or at least I'm kind of conditioned to think of it as one, so when I read the line I thought it was going to go into a dialogue, and when the next paragraph started off with an action, it confused me for a few seconds. I'm not saying that the word's use here is wrong or anything, but it just made me go like ? for a moment. "Devona cried out as the man’s body slammed into her and she lost her balance. Next thing she knew, she was lying in the dirt with the man on top of her." So this is the love interest then? LIterally knocked her off her feet! Nice! XD "Probably his most striking features though were his deep yellow eyes. They were something that Devona would expect to find on a predator," Vampire! Vampiiiiire! D: "Sure, the shirt wasn’t quite too far out, but it was rather weird. It wasn’t baggy like the shirts that most guys wear. It was tight and tucked into his blue bell bottoms? Not to mention his white platform shoes." Oh god, he really IS a vampire! XD Or at least a Buffyverse vampire, before they nixed the whole 'vampires wear period dress from when they were sired' idea. Jokes aside, I do like that this guy is wearing 'inappropriate' clothing. Gives personality to the story and is a nice bit of attention to detail! Also I can't help but notice you went with the 'say he's hot and define skin tone and eye and hair color Meyer school' of describing the romantic interest! People get on Meyer's case about this one, but it's honestly not a bad technique! It's a great way to get some audience participation going. Now I can imagine him to look like whatever I want when I self-insert as Devona... Yeah, he's got a strong face with broad cheekbones... or... but wait, I'm automatically self-inserting as Kimmy. What do? D: "“Do you need a hand?” he asked. She could tell that he was really annoyed, but it was one of the sweetest things that anyone had ever done for her." That is quite sweet! Knock down a lady, she yells at him like a banshee, but he still helps her up! What a gentleman! "“I’m sorry. I can’t let you go Princess.”" Oh no! This is where it starts! Protects your necks, everyones! XD "the man whose name apparently was Ulric. " Huh. Now that's an interesting coincidence, in my story I also have a character named Ulric... well, Ulryk. But that's basically the same name. How did you come up with that name for your character? For mine, I looked it up on a Polish baby name generator and apparently it means something like 'heritage, patrimony, rich, powerful, ruler.' Thought it was a fitting name for a King in my story whose descendants would be "[raised up] to be kings over all the Earth." "Devona lost all hope. Why were they all dressed as if they had just stepped out of the seventies?" For some reason I'm getting a kicking Dr. Who vibe. "There had been too many amber alerts lately and she did not want to be one." Can't stop laughing. XD I know amber alerts are like a totally serious thing and all, but this is a great line. "The tone of the voice was like velvet touching her ears. It was so sweet and seemingly innocent she couldn’t help but open her eyes to see the most shocking sight of her life." Nice description there. I'm making the call now, it's gonna be a DRAGON! Okay, well, uh, that turned into more of like a reaction/commentary thing than an actual review. Actual review starts here! For starters, I have a confession to make... Just going off the blurb alone, this is not the kind of story that I probably would have read on my own. That being said, I'm having a great time reading this. It's super-fun and while it's really cliche (at least so far), that's not inherently a bad thing. It all comes down to execution and I think you executed it very well. Don't really have much of a grasp on the characters yet so far, except for maybe Kimmy (but that might just be because I'm self-inserting as her), but that should come with later chapters. There's a number of small spelling and grammar errors here and there, 'farris wheel' instead of 'ferris wheel,' 'evil intensions' instead of 'evil intentions,' 'held no interested to her' instead of 'held no interest to her.' I dunno if you wanna invest in an editor or a beta reader or whatnot. They're not eg... egree... egregious (had to look that spelling up) enough to cause major disruption in flow or the reading experience, but they're noticeable. Will read the next chapter tomorrow! Hopefully. Looking forward to it!"

fav novel

"l just loved . it's one of my favourite novel. I just can't wait for the second one . Hope this isn't the end . plllllzzzzzzzzzz. I wonder what the second one would be like? hope it's just as amazing as this one or maybe better."

The ending.

"Why did it end like that?? Jesus. I hate the cliff hanger, pleeaaasssseeeeee tel me there is a second one coming along?? Uggghhhh. Other than the ending, I loved it. There are missing words and backward words throughout it but common sense helps you understand what was trying to be said. "