DAUGHTER OF THE TIDES

"Your opening chapter sets an incredible, atmospheric hook by using the vivid transition from a roaring storm to an unnatural silence to immediately captivate the reader. To make it even stronger, focus on engaging sensory details like the smell of ozone and the icy touch of the spray, while grounding the midwife's physical shock to deepen the scene's emotional weight. Tightening some of the single-sentence paragraphs will smooth out the pacing and keep your readers completely immersed in Thalassa's magical origin."