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THE LOVE THAT WAS HIDDEN

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Summary

She thought family was a place to call home. But it turned out not to be, everything vanished like smoke. Freyna is kicked out by her mother. Without knowing where she wil go. Frank receives a message that shatters his heart into a million pieces. Fate brings FREYNA and FRANK together after years of pain and sorrow. Follow so you don't miss a new chapter every SUNDAY AT 2:00 PM ❤

Genre
Romance
Author
Frazia
Status
1mo ago
Chapters
3
Rating
n/a
Age Rating
16+

THE LOVE THAT WAS HIDDEN

CHAPTER 1

The rain was falling angrily. Lightning struck every few minutes.

It was as if the sky itself was angry.

Outside the main gate of a normal house. A girl was kneeling in the mud.

Rainwater was streaming down her, from her head all the way to her back.

Her clothes were completely soaked and sticking to her body.

From inside the gate, the sound of a woman shouting could be heard.

_"Get out Freyna! I said get out of my house!_

_You shameless girl! How dare you do this disgrace inside my house?"_

It was the voice of Mrs. Rahel, Freyna's mother.

The gate slammed behind her. Her mother's voice was still shouting from inside.

Passersby had stopped far away. Some were hiding under umbrellas. They were taking pictures with their phones and whispering.

Freyna was silent. She just crossed her arms over her chest.

The rain was cold on her skin.

Freyne didn't cry. She didn't say a single word to defend herself.

She knew whatever she said would not be understood.

That one rainy evening, Freyna's life changed.


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author

Hi Wildshimmer,

Thank you so much for your kind and honest feedback! You are right, I was revealing everything at once and using too much telling.

I have edited Chapter 1 now. I cut the flashback and kept only the rainy evening moment to create a hook, just like you advised. I will keep the Veranda story for Chapter 2.

Your comment really opened my eyes. I appreciate you taking the time to help a new writer like me. Thank you!

- Frazia

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One more thing. You know everyone can read your author notes?

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Thank you for letting me know! Yes I know they are public, I just wanted to thank the person who helped me improve my chapter ❤️

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