What is your opinion?
Great Twist
"I think overall there is a strong story here, however, some of the terms and phrases you have used are very... safe. For example "stunning brunette with the body of a model." That doesn't give me much. Is she a fashion model? (can range from 5'4 to 511) Or runway model? (Min. height 5'7) in my opinion, It is an overused and underwhelming descriptor. There are a few over uses of commas, but for the most part, grammatically your book is sound. I enjoyed reading it so far :D Let's see what you got next."
Ionshaker Desperate, The Manhunt
"Good detective story, involving the FBI taking over the case from the LAPD. A women Shot in the heart, a husband missing, now a person of interest, driving north in his vehicle, away from the Crime scene of his now murdered wife. The wife had visited a shrink, who had become friends with the Deceased, and informed the FBI that the husband , according to the Wife, might be having an affair with the husbands past girl friend. When the FBI left the Doctors office, the Doctor immediately placed a call to an undisclosed person that the plan was regarding the Death of the Wife, was on track.........a nice twist to the story...........the plot thickens and the FBI are pursuing all clues, including the seman found in the body of the deceased..........good writing....."
Black Days, and Blacker Nights
"The word that came to mind was economy, or economical. As a writer myself I appreciated the economy with which Felix grabbed the reader's attention, raised the question of mystery, of broader implications and sketched in the background of the unfolding police / FBI investigation. He quickly fleshed out the primary characters as they entered the first chapters. Quite clearly this is not Felix's first foray into the world of words and their best assembly and the reader is comfortable they are in the hands of a competent guide. You just know there are going to be many twists and surprises ahead and are keen to have the spotlight shred the darkness of the unknown. I also liked the way he ended the chapters on a question mark or a note of uncertainty. This is a very impressive beginning to a book I feel will deliver the goods, and am keen to read the remainder - quickly. Eric J Drysdale - E: [email protected]"
