What is your opinion?
Gas Death Town
"Ted1995. Your descriptions of war are gory and explicit.......Your Characters dream, brought him back to the war he fought in and lived through you.. Need to work on punctuation, grammar and writing skills before you submit this and future chapters. a bit confusing when the english is not correct.........however, it is a good thing that you are involved with a story on a time that actually existed and the losses were very graffick. This review is to help you and give you guidance in your life as a writer. Keep up the good writing... william elliott kern"
Realistic
"I liked the way you emphasised the problems war brought out in the fighters, and the way you made Adrian feel alone. It was realistic and well done. My problem, however, was the grammar. Often, words were missing or the words were spelt wrong etc. This made the story slightly difficult to read. Also, at the start, I didn't understand what Adrian's plan was, and later I didn't understand what Adrian had done which didn't save the Germans, his enemies. This confused me, so perhaps add some more background. If you can't see your mistakes, perhaps ask friend or family or a beta-reader here to review it for you. Apart from the above, this story has potential. I liked the story-line. Good luck!"
