Great!

"I am relatively new to inkitt, but I want to help as much as I can, so please don't get offended from my feedback. So, lets start. First off, I really like how you're kind of mixing two stories in one, which I think is really creative. I noticed one spelling mistake in chapter one. When Lance was describing Rachel, he referred to her shorts as "jorts". I really admire your writing style, but in the beginning, you made me kind of confused on if Xion was actually a story or whether some one was reading it allowed. Something to make up for that is to say in the beginning something like, "Lance cleared his throat," but anything works, really. Im kind of confused on whats going to happen next, there aren't any cliffhangers. I suggest you add some of those, or at least try adding some humor-that will make up for it. I'm happy that your characters have all unique personalities, because if the plot gets messed up, they will make up for it. When I got to chapter 2, I was kind of confused whether Lance was writing or Maya was reading it aloud. Other than that, the story was great. I can't wait for the next chapters. Keep it up! -Frosting"