What is your opinion?
First Chapters
"From the first sentence, I got pulled into the story. It keeps me in suspense and literally doesn't let me go. I enjoy the conversational, witty and at times humorous style of writing. I like the main character. Lucy has a distinct personality, and though she isn't an angel, I immediately rooted for her. Can't wait to see what happens to her and her friend. The only comment I have is that the paragraphs are rather big and could be split at least in half in many places. It would be easier on the eyes. But it's a minor note and can be easily fixed. I absolutely love the story and the way it's told. Highly recommend!"
"The Girl in the Red Cloak"
"Nicole, Why are you making me wait for more of your book to be presented..........ha ha..........seriously, great story, the two orphans, Lucy and Belle, living in the Catholic Orphanage. Both Girls were close, friends and Belle raised the question to Lucy if she wished to run away to the Big City. Lucy agreed, and the two girls packed their bags and left at night. Lucy was locked inside a wooden shed, Belle releasing her. Belle had both bags packed for the trip and off the two friends went..... being confronted by the Principal of the Local School, searching for the girls in the snow covered woods, was attacked by a wolf and hurt badly while searching for the girls. The girls refused to return to the Orphanage and continued their journey through the woods meeting a stray Dog, feeding it with bread and water, then continuing to the river for water and spotting a carriage on the other side of the river.. The Royal Carriage was occupied by two adults and two kids, a girl and a boy............whew.....now............the story Nicole is captivating, The plot is underway and well expressed, your style of writing is excellent and easy to follow, as I have tried to express in your story above. Wonderful writing and worthy of 5 star or more rating...............you are an excellent writer, oops..Author as well. William"
First few chapters
"Four chapters of this book are up at the time I'm reading this. It's a really interesting start to the book, and I want to read more! I like the premise and main character - she tries to have this tough girl demeanor about her, but is very kind to Maribel, which shows off her loving and protective side. There's potential for some really good character development. I'm curious to see how things will unfold from here!"
The girl in the red cloak.
"The plot is very interesting so far and I like the dynamic between Lucy and Maribel. Their dialogue was believable and their interactions are the strongest points in the story. Though I will have to say that the story did start slow, especially with the large chunks of paragraphs that needed to be shortened. It's easy to lose the reader when you throw in large paragraphs with no breaks, it can cause readers to skim over information and it can mess up the pace. But overall I like the concept and am curious what's going to happen next."
