The Old Balmain House
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The Old Balmain House

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Summary

Sophie vanished - where did she go? For 100 years nobody knows. Her photo and antique perfume bottle are found in an old house. A Sydney family over 170 years. At last we find out the true story.

Status
Complete
Chapters
25
Rating
5.0 (6 reviews)
Age Rating
16+

Prologue

We bought ourselves a new old house – a magical timber cottage

It made us feel most welcome – gave a sense of a loving home

It seemed we belonged here – soon making it into our own

We glimpsed a hidden story – deep buried and held fast

It told about a little girl who lived here in a century past

This child went off to school one day and never did come back

It seemed to all who looked so hard she’d vanished through a crack

For years and years her family searched, seeking her elusive soul

Emptiness was all they found – she’d vanished and left a hole

Loss carried on, down years and years, as generations passed

The memory slowly dwindled, fading out of view at last

We heard her voice call out one day seeking help for her return

We joined the search; it drew us in, new people in this place

Across a century of time and space a presence led us on

At last we found a vital clue, lost story of her grandmother

And as we walked on hidden steps her family became our own

Now, at last, after all that’s passed, we’ve safely brought her home

Let GrahamWilson know what you thought about this chapter!

LukeMoore
LukeMoore

An engaging prologue, a lot expressed poignantly in a few words.

4 years
Evelyn_246
Evelyn_246

Hi GrahamWilson,

I just finished reading your story “The Old Balmain House” and I loved it so much. Your writing is amazing, and I kept thinking how visually compelling it would look as a comic.

One scene that really stood out is in Chapter 1, when the family moves into the old timber cottage and discovers the hidden story of Sophie, the little girl who vanished a century ago. The eerie atmosphere of the house, combined with the sense of mystery surrounding Sophie's disappearance, creates a compelling setting that would translate beautifully into comic panels. The contrast between the family's excitement and the house's haunting past adds depth to the narrative, making it ideal for visual storytelling.

That blend of mystery, historical intrigue, and emotional depth makes The Old Balmain House feel tailor-made for a comic adaptation. The complex characters and intricate plot would look incredible in illustrated form.

I’m a commissioned artist, and I’d love to draw your story into a comic/manga. No pressure though.I just believe your work would look amazing in visual form.

You can check out some of my recent work on my DeviantArt (Username – Ev3Verse). If you’re interested, please message me on Discord (Username – Eve_verse) so we can bring the suspense and mystery of your story to life visually. I’ll be waiting to hear from you!

Regards,
Evee

a year

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