What is your opinion?
Review of First Chapter
"It went from an ordinary writing experience we all have (except I've never hurt my fingers typing) to a fantasy we've all had (if you aren't gender-specific), took an old theme (man falls in love with computer) and made for an engaging start."
Nice!
"This was certainly a fun read! I liked the way you portrayed the future, enjoyed the emotions, and found this a quite light-hearted quick read. Your sentences are clear, although a few at the start could be edited to sound more natural. The main thing you need to edit is the mistakes. There were often words missing or words too much, as well as a few verbs written in past tense instead of present. Other than that, this was great! I loved the way it was written - the only reason you had a 4 in writing style was because of awkward sentences (which I'm sure you can change easily.) also, the ending seemed rushed. Perhaps try giving the character time to think about Ronnie. The questions at the end seemed forced. Also, I like it that you'll be talking about a relationship that didn't work because most books don't talk about that, and I wish you good luck! I also think it's an important theme that isn't talked much about in society. Nice!"
