What is your opinion?
Enthrallingly awesome
"This is so cool, unique and awesome story! I was hooked from the first page and am utterly impatient to read more! Please update soon!"
Devereux
"An entertaining romp with a modern day hero in a Mediaeval setting. An interesting array of characters, a smattering of romance and a supernatural element. What more could you want?"
Unsure
"Overall a very good start. I hope you're not upset at some of my comments. I wasn't sure in some cases whether you were trying to be colloquial with some of the grammatical errors. You would perhaps benefit from a good editor familiar with what you're trying to do. It's not easy to know how and when to add colloquialisms to dialog. It can easily go wrong and trip up the reader. The concept is good, though, I had a little trouble visualizing the mine / cave complex and how some of the logistics would work. It might have been better to introduce the bad guy (guys) sooner so that Phil's sudden dislike and hostile actions would seem more normal. As I said, it's a good idea with imaginative action. I'd like to know how he gets back, or if he stays."
