I need more!

"I got to the end of this chapter and tried to click for the next when I realized that there WASN'T another one yet. This was a great beginning, and I hope that there will be more coming soon. It started out slowly, but once it sunk its hooks in, it wouldn't let go. I really loved the interaction between the two brothers -- it was really endearing and natural. This story also had a sinister twist, with the incident in the fun house and Benji's strange episode (love the name, btw ^^). It left me wanting more and gave the cheery trip to the amusement park a whole new flavor. The writing itself was concise and very well polished, and I never noticed a time when it distracted from the story. This is really great work so far. I can't wait to see what happens next! Keep writing!"