Intriguing and Engaging

"I really loved your storyline - the initial premise is intriguing and engaging, and the pace of the story flows well and kept me reading. You have a very good start, and the effort put writing the story is evident. However, you still need to refine your style: some lines read more smoothly than others. And beware of profanity - twice within a few lines felt a bit too much, and can be off putting to some readers. As a Literature professor once told me: if you are to use profanity, at least try to be creative. I look forward to reading more of Chasing Time."