Good plot

"Its a great plot but you almost lost me the first half if it wasnt for my ocd of finishing what i read. You got much better by the end dont worry. The first half needs some work. I had to reread sections multiple times because of the run on sentences, no punctuation and trying to figure out who was saying what. Way too wordy and too many similes. It also made it hard to and frustrating trying to imagine it happening in your head when you cant figure out their skin color to visualize them properly. You added in the descriptions in the second half but it could be a good idea to have that in the first half. By the second half you had the rhythm down and the story flowed really well. Im looking forward to seeing how our hero villain takes down the villain. "