What is your opinion?
A story in the future
"A good idea for the start of a story. Your spelling, punctuation can improve so that it is easier to understand the story. I like how you present how businessmen trump politics in the future as conditions change. Also, the politicians are adults, even if just puppets, so I would like to suggest less drastic reactions from them when told about the oxygen level and even North America, though Mr Fox's reaction is not so bad. Politicians are good at hiding their feelings and I don't think this will change very much in future. But it's a good start, waiting to read the next chapters."
interesting read
"The plot so far is interesting and is a good read but I would advice you to revise the grammatical details and punctuation. The beginning exposition could be made a little more fluid to read. I ll be waiting to read the next chapter."
