What is your opinion?
Legendary Seraphs and Monsters
"The Letter of Hope is a clever cross between fantasy and scifi. From Chapter 1, the author already showed her prowess in worldbuilding. Names are somehow Hawaiian/Scandinavian for me and they fit the context of the world. However, there are some issues I found about it. One thing I can suggest to the author is to create a map or a glossary for your worlds. I believe in the power of narration too, but too much of it especially information going out of hand and not relatable to the scene itself can distract the overall flow of the story. As for the characterization, Lupan is my personal favorite as of chapter 4. The forensics, CSI, and detective work are well-researched. You've done a great job with those but the thing about omniscient pov is the freedom you have to spun your 'literary camera' around your readers. With that, your writing style is good; the only thing keeping me from being engaged is the random drop of words exclusive to the world itself. I also have no problem with the technical writing skills. There are punctuations missing sometimes, but it didn't put me off from the narrative. Recommended to fans of Laini T. (Author of Strange the Dreamer), Nalini Singh (Guildhunter series), and lovers of legends, citadels, and nephilim and seraphs. Keep on writing, author! Can't wait to see what's next for Lupan and Kahi. :)"
The letter of hope
"First of all I am not 18 and this story has an age limit.But I am a woman of my words so I did it. Don't worry my mental age is perhaps 118.The plot twists, the characters were quite refined, I recommend the story line is pretty great for adults."
Good read.
"Liked your plot and writing style. I recommend everyone to read this adventurous story."
Review!
"Hi Gryphonstar, Sci-fi is my "thing" so I was drawn to read your first chapter, and I really like your writing style! The imagery is very good and there's a good deal of action and strong characters in that first chapter. I didn't rate the plot highly just yet because it's impossible to determine from one chapter however the action had me wanting to read more. In terms of criticism, please take what follows as positive and constructive, designed to help you. There are some typos and some phrasing that needs to be fixed. For example: "The place was almost quiet saved from the whispers of the cloaked figures." The meaning is clear, but I think the correct wording should be something like: "The place was quiet save for the whispers of cloaked figures." Meaning that if the whispers of the cloaked figures were not present, it *would* be quiet. Additionally, it's *save for* rather than *saved from*. Also I noticed quite a few typos in the one sentence starting with "The Athantos Citadel": 'hieght', 'lowred' and 'broughtfade'. A simple spellchecker or a program like Hemingway (free spell-checker online, if you Google it.) Also, I found that I was not visualising all of the different races (cainesc, katzenartig, etc) very well. In future chapters I hope these races/species will be explained a bit more in future chapters. There is a lot of intrigue and action in this, more than enough to keep the reader interested, and that's the most important part of any fiction, I believe. I will be following this story and best of luck with it :-) Regards, Scott"
